Brian DeLapp
ENG101 M02
Essay #2
When students that are thinking about going to college, the one thing that is on their mind is getting the acceptance letter in the mail. When students are looking to get accepted to the well known colleges like Harvard or Yale, the controversial issue of “legacy admissions” is probably bound to cross their minds. Especially the people who didn’t make the cut to get enrolled. People see different views of “legacy admissions”, some say that they’re good to have, when there are other people who think they are unfair and colleges shouldn’t use them.
In the article “Diversity in whose Interest?”, Paula Krebs disagrees with the legacy admissions issue, she believes that just because someone of the wealthier class whose parents can afford to send their child to a Ivy league college, such as Harvard, doesn’t mean that they should. Krebs believes that class becomes an issue when dealing with the acceptance of a student to a major college, because “Class begins shaping children’s fates in the womb”. She implies that families with low-income are less likely to receive well parental care, move to different schools more often, and even being less interactive with their children, unlike the parents that have medium to high income rates.
In 2003 The Post Standard published and article about affirmative action/ and legacy admissions. The article was about a supreme-court decision between a University of Michigan acceptance policy and the policies about student acceptance of all universities and colleges located in the US. Michigan’s undergraduate acceptance policy was assigning points on the race of the student. The points system that they used only gave minority students 20 out of a 150 total. Although the Supreme Court denied the University of Michigan’s policy (points system) they are allowing colleges and universities to continue considering race as a factor in policies to advance diversity and address discrimination. Justice S. O’Connor believes “a diverse student body better prepares all graduates for the working world. It is essential to its educational mission”
George Leef, the VP for research at the John William Pope Center for Higher Education Policy, feels that legacy admissions should not be allowed to be used to accept students for higher education. He sees legacy admissions as “unfair to the students, and that they should be evaluated on their merits”. He also believes that getting rid of legacy preferences will make it easier on the schools to say no to preferences based on race and ethnicity. A problem that he brings up with the admissions is that students are being accepted who are not as academically skilled as other students, which makes the professors, of the classes that their taking, to lessen the requirements of passing the class.
Legacy admissions are “accepting a student due to the fact that his parents or family members attended a college or university in the prior years, not on the students’ academic skills. It is a controversial issue that people disagree with each other on, some agree that it’s good for a college to have sort students out and to keep their reputation as a college. Meanwhile others say it is unfair to the students and that it should be disallowed.
Work Sited Page
Krebs, Paula M. “Diversity in Whose Interest?” Academe pg.135-137 (2008).
ProQuest . TC3 library 22 Feb.2009 http://proquest.umi.com/pqdweb?did=1536192431&Fmt=3&clientId=12441&RQT=309&VName=PQD
“Affirmative Action – Split Decision still wisely upholds sound policy in Michigan case”
education. The Post Standard 28 June, 2003 http://docs.newsbank.com/s/InfoWeb/aggdocs/NewsBank/0FCE9BD33893A960/0F9989E5D6CE7776
Pope Center’s George Leef Discusses Legacy Admissions. George Leef.
Youtube.com , 22 Feb. 2009
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ENG101 Essay 2 "Legacy Admissions"
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ENG101 M02
Essay #2
[Title page]
When students that are
[De “that”]
thinking about going to college, the one thing that is on their mind is getting the acceptance letter in the mail. When
[Ec]
students are looking to
[Di]
get accepted to the well known
[Sp] well-known
colleges like Harvard or Yale, the controversial issue of “legacy admissions” is probably bound to cross their minds. Especially the people who didn’t make the cut to get enrolled.
[Fr] [Re]
People see different views
[Unidiomatic] have different opinions
of “legacy admissions”,
[Pu: comma goes before quotation mark]
legacy admissions policies,
[Cs]
some say that they’re good to have, when there are other people who
they are good, while others
think they
[Ambiguous; antecedent =?]
are unfair and
[Pu] unfair, and
colleges shouldn’t use them.
In the article “Diversity in whose Interest? ”,
[Pu: comma goes before quotation mark]
Paula Krebs disagrees with the legacy admissions issue,
[Usage: one disagrees with a proposition or a person, not with an issue]
[Cs]
she believes that just because someone of the wealthier class whose parents can afford to send their child to a Ivy league college, such as Harvard, doesn’t mean
[Nn] [Ga, Re]
that they should. Krebs believes that class becomes an issue when dealing
[Dm]
with the acceptance of a student to a major college, because
[Pu: no comma]
“Class begins shaping children’s fates in the womb”.
[Pu: period goes before quotation mark]
She implies that families with low-income are less likely to receive well
good
parental care, move to different schools more often, and even being less interactive with their children,
[Unparallel]
unlike the parents that have medium to high income rates.
parents with medium or high incomes.
In 2003 The Post Standard
[Pu: italics]
published and
[Pr] an
article about affirmative action/ and
[Pu] action and
legacy admissions. The article was about a supreme-court
Supreme Court
decision between
[Ga, Rp] a University of Michigan acceptance
admissions
policy and the policies about student acceptance of all universities and colleges located in the US.
[Ga, Rp]
Michigan’s undergraduate acceptance policy
[Re]
was assigning points on the race of the student.
points for the applicants’ race.
The points system
[Re]
that they used only gave minority students 20 out of a 150 total.
[Not clear]
Although the Supreme Court denied
[Not clear] overturned [?]
the University of Michigan’s policy (points system)
[Ga]
they
[=?]
are allowing
[Vt: past decision] allowed
colleges and universities
[just one]
to continue considering race as a factor in policies to advance
[Ga]
diversity and address discrimination. Justice S. O’Connor believes “a diverse student body better prepares all graduates for the working world. It is essential to its educational mission”
[Pu] mission.”
George Leef, the VP
vice president
for research at the John William Pope Center for Higher Education Policy, feels that legacy admissions should not be allowed to be used
[Re]
to accept students
[policies don’t accept]
for higher education. He sees legacy admissions as “unfair to the students, and that
[unparallel]
they should be evaluated on their merits”.
[Pu: period goes before quotation mark]
He also believes that getting rid of legacy preferences will
would
make it easier on
for
the schools to say no to preferences based on race and ethnicity. A problem that he brings up with the
[which?]
admissions is that students are being accepted who are not as academically skilled
[unidiomatic]
as other students, which makes the professors, of
[Pu: no comma]
the classes that their taking, to lessen the requirements of passing the class.
[Pu: no comma] which forces professors to lower standards.
Legacy admissions are “accepting
[Signal phrase?] [Legacy admissions do not accept]
a student due to the fact that his parents or family members attended a college or university in the prior years, not on the students’ academic skills. It
This
is a controversial issue that people disagree with each other on,
[Re]
some agree
[Cs]
that it’s
[it =?]
good for a college to have sort students out
[Ga, Rp]
and to keep their
[they=?]
reputation as a college. Meanwhile others say it is unfair to the students and that it should be disallowed.
[it =?]
[This “conclusion” is introductory material.]
Work
Works
Sited
Cited
Page
[De]
Krebs, Paula M. “Diversity in Whose Interest?” Academe pg.135-137 (2008).
[Format]
ProQuest . TC3 library 22 Feb.2009 http://proquest.umi.com/pqdweb?did=1536192431&Fmt=3&clientId=12441&RQT=309&VName=PQD
[Format]
“Affirmative Action – Split Decision still wisely upholds sound policy in Michigan case”
[Capitals]
education.
[???]
The Post Standard 28 June, 2003 http://docs.newsbank.com/s/InfoWeb/aggdocs/NewsBank/0FCE9BD33893A960/0F9989E5D6CE7776
[Format]
Pope Center’s George Leef Discusses Legacy Admissions. George Leef.
Youtube.com , 22 Feb. 2009
[Format. URL?]
Cn = comma needed
Cs = comma splice
Co = countability problem
De = delete
Di = low diction, slang
Dm = dangling modifier
Ec = echo (unwanted repetition)
Fr = fragment
Ga = garbled
Hy = hyphenation
If = incorrect format
Uc = upper case (capitalize)
Lc = lower case (don't capitalize)
Nn = no-no (don't use this expression)
Po = possessive
Pr = proofread!
Pp = pronoun problem
Pu = punctuation
Re = redundant
Rp = rephrase
Sp = spelling
Up = unparallel structure
Us = incorrect usage
Vt = verb tense
Wo = wordy